Thursday, January 14, 2010

change to HongKong email

I would omit ‘pleased as punch’-it sounds rather unprofessional and is an American phrase that they might not now. Also, I would not say we want to ‘sell you America’-it sounds rather forceful and pushy. Also, level best is a strange term to use here I feel). And I would spell out ASAP if you want it to be more formal.(my thoughts)

I wanted to welcome you as soon as possible to our branch in the United States. I am looking forward to being able to shake hands with you in person. I am very excited about getting to know you all and will do my best to ensure that you enjoy your time in the states. (revised email☺)

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